考过雅思的帮忙评估下我的写作水平吧!

ringsun

非打击，5分最多，以俺考试的经验哦。

语法错误太多，很多低级错误。
建议，不要东施效颦，把自己掌握的东西发挥出来就可以了，踏踏实实的表达出自己的思想，有条理，有逻辑，词汇语法稍微多样就有6分！

ringsun

这个６分，实战哦，我自己的考试答案，我回来回忆出来的

Many people claim recently that the primary schools should pay more
   attention to the basic subjects such as science and technology, instead
   of the “less important” subjects, for example, history and geography.
   Personally, I cannot agree with this point to a great extent.

   Admittedly, science and technology are very important subjects. Science
   tells us what are the things like. Without science, for example, we
   could not know why the birds can fly in the air, so we cannot invent
   airplanes today. Technology tells us how to use the science knowledge to
   make our lives more convenient and comfortable. These are very important
   in our society. Undoubtedly, we should pay attention to them in the
   schools.

   However, science and technology are not the only things we need to know.
   We also need to know what the places we are living in are like and whom
   we are. Science and technology cannot answer these questions well, but
   geography and history can do this. For instance, geography tells us that
   we are living in a country, there are many other countries in the world
   and every country has their features, the mountains, the rivers and the
   people. History, on the other hand, tells us what our ancestors are like
   and why we are living in this condition today. All of these can make us
   more self-conscious so we can be clearer what we should do now.

   To sum up, I think the educators should not focus only on the basic
   subjects and neglect the other essential subjects, like geography and
   history, after all, the children need more knowledge about the world to
   live more beautiful lives in the future.